Help and rate my first song? What needs to be done?

honestly the lines are really long, so you would need fast delivery forit to rhyme.. other wise it would sound slow like a poem. also, i dont really see a beat that could fit with your chorus. ontop of that though, its kinda contridictory, you said you just wanna make beats, but then you started talking about dealing cigs. honestly that was very funny. imo dont rap about your self if your not famous, thats something you do after you make a hit.